¿Podéis ver mi redacción en inglés?

Me gustaría que me ayudaráis con esta redacción, la publiqué en otro sitio y no obtuve respuesta, me gustaría que me sacaran errores para mejorar mi inglés, por favor.

She turns on the camera, the objective looking at her:
-Hello, name's Ana, my English teacher asked me to describe the hobbies of my family and that's what I gonna do!
She goes down the stairs (please if there's a verb for this write it below, thanks), and opens a wooden door:
-There you see, my father, Elric! He's kind of a special creature, as he transforms during the day. In the first half of the day, he's sleeping on the couch...- ¿She comes near and starts painting a potato on one of his cheeks- Who's a couch potato~~? Youuuuu~~~! But at night, he becomes a party animal and is a regular of a really noisy bar in front of my house.
She moves to a different room, with a blue painted door, and points a guy tinkering around a computer:
-This is my bro, Enrike, he's a freak of games, a technology buff, an enthusiast of Vocaloid, an Avid of computers... Well, you get the idea, he even didn't notice me!- She gets out and the boy looks around confused. -¿What was that...?
-Anddddd...- She opens the back door, looking to a garden- That's my mum!-
-Hi sweetie! ¿Doin' homework?- She's doing a yoga position, the camel.
-Yup! Kind of! Had to say the hobbies y'all have!-
-¿Can I talk?
-Sure!
-Well, call me Kat, I'm Ana's mother and I really like yoga and doing outdoor activities, I think that makes me an outdoorwoman- She laughs.- I also enjoy being a social butterfly with my gym mates and neighbours.
-Thanks mum!
-No problem! Finally, it's my turn! -She points the objective at her- I'm what you can call a do-gooder and really like helping my mates, lost animals, the elder and my family. Many people call me Misses Fix It 'cause I really am crafty and enjoy fixing everything torn or broken that meets my hands. Thank you for coming here, watching me and thank you for everything!