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GO OVER CAMP
Once three teens went out of ecological walk and to encamp, during your journey they found plants and animals; in the way they sat down a couple of times and to eating, then the way was very long; they don't to get bored started singing and telling exciting histories; then found a lake where swam an hour, and continued your way; when the night came they decided to stop and to pass the night there.
Then started assembling the tent, since it was the first time that they were doing a camp they couldn't do it like and I keep silent about several times, but weren't losing the hope on the contrary there were amusing themselves every that this was passing, until they achieved it with your teamwork; this one was a cold night and they decided to do a bonfire to warm up, in this one they did marshmallows, fish and took soda; they to remember always this moment, took many photos; when they got tired they entered to the tent and none tape-worm I dream and they didn't know that to do, because for the weariness they were not capable of getting up, but of sleeping and they were getting bored either, then to one of them it happened him to tell histories of fear, But the girl doesn't like the idea because she was very fearful, but varieties of stories convinced and told her until they got tired and started listening to music, to singing and this way they was making sleepy them and they remained slept.
After sleeping approximately two hours the girl felt out of the tent strange noises so she woke his friends up to warn them, they did not make him very much elegant and tried to fall asleep again, then they returned to listen to the noise but you see this one more strongly, and they all woke up very scared on having seen out a strange shade, they all sat down without knowing that to do, each one thought a different thing, one of them thought that it was a question of a ghost that she wanted to take them to an unknown dimension, the girl thought that he was a vampire, the major one thought that he was an extraterrestrial being who wanted to take them to him them to your planet. They decided to go out to see that it was what them was scaring.
The major one went out of first, another guy continued it and the girl for doesn't remaining alone go out behind them, suddenly a cow appeared and I scare them but on having seen them they laughed. Then they started playing with it, milked and saw her that tape-worm a necklace and a stamp that was identifying and saying the address of the owner, so the gays doesn't to run away the moor. Carefully, entered to the tent, there they planned that the following day would get up early, they would organize your things, would've breakfast and would be going to remove the cow to your owner; for the way they would stop in the lake to bathing, washing your clothes and the dirty plates, also they would enter to a left house and would leave there the objects that more wanted and some of your photos in order that this way when they were returning, they would remember this great experience, also they were going to take advantage that it was early to play with the animals that they were living there. , After delivering the cow would be going to an ice-cream parlor to refresh and be told to other friends and relatives well that had happened in this journey, then they would be going to finish a task that was treating itself about the best experience of your lives, finally they went to bed to sleeping and to be prepared for this great day.
Once three teens went out of ecological walk and to encamp, during your journey they found plants and animals; in the way they sat down a couple of times and to eating, then the way was very long; they don't to get bored started singing and telling exciting histories; then found a lake where swam an hour, and continued your way; when the night came they decided to stop and to pass the night there.
Then started assembling the tent, since it was the first time that they were doing a camp they couldn't do it like and I keep silent about several times, but weren't losing the hope on the contrary there were amusing themselves every that this was passing, until they achieved it with your teamwork; this one was a cold night and they decided to do a bonfire to warm up, in this one they did marshmallows, fish and took soda; they to remember always this moment, took many photos; when they got tired they entered to the tent and none tape-worm I dream and they didn't know that to do, because for the weariness they were not capable of getting up, but of sleeping and they were getting bored either, then to one of them it happened him to tell histories of fear, But the girl doesn't like the idea because she was very fearful, but varieties of stories convinced and told her until they got tired and started listening to music, to singing and this way they was making sleepy them and they remained slept.
After sleeping approximately two hours the girl felt out of the tent strange noises so she woke his friends up to warn them, they did not make him very much elegant and tried to fall asleep again, then they returned to listen to the noise but you see this one more strongly, and they all woke up very scared on having seen out a strange shade, they all sat down without knowing that to do, each one thought a different thing, one of them thought that it was a question of a ghost that she wanted to take them to an unknown dimension, the girl thought that he was a vampire, the major one thought that he was an extraterrestrial being who wanted to take them to him them to your planet. They decided to go out to see that it was what them was scaring.
The major one went out of first, another guy continued it and the girl for doesn't remaining alone go out behind them, suddenly a cow appeared and I scare them but on having seen them they laughed. Then they started playing with it, milked and saw her that tape-worm a necklace and a stamp that was identifying and saying the address of the owner, so the gays doesn't to run away the moor. Carefully, entered to the tent, there they planned that the following day would get up early, they would organize your things, would've breakfast and would be going to remove the cow to your owner; for the way they would stop in the lake to bathing, washing your clothes and the dirty plates, also they would enter to a left house and would leave there the objects that more wanted and some of your photos in order that this way when they were returning, they would remember this great experience, also they were going to take advantage that it was early to play with the animals that they were living there. , After delivering the cow would be going to an ice-cream parlor to refresh and be told to other friends and relatives well that had happened in this journey, then they would be going to finish a task that was treating itself about the best experience of your lives, finally they went to bed to sleeping and to be prepared for this great day.
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No parece muy correcto, lo puedo corregir, pero mandame el texto en castellano
Una vez tres jóvenes salieron de paseo ecológico y a acampar, durante su recorrido encontraron plantas y animales; en el camino se sentaron un par de veces a descansar y a comer, pues el camino era muy largo; ellos para no aburrirse empezaron a cantar y a contar historias emocionantes; luego encontraron un lago donde nadaron una hora, y siguieron su camino; al llegar la noche decidieron parar y pasar la noche allí.
Entonces empezaron a armar la carpa, como era la primera vez que hacían un campamento ellos no sabían como hacerla y se les callo varias veces, pero no perdían la paciencia por el contrario se divertían cada que esto pasaba, hasta que lo lograron con su trabajo en equipo; esta era una noche fría y decidieron hacer una fogata para calentarse, en esta hicieron malvaviscos, pescado y tomaron soda; ellos para recordar siempre este momento, tomaron muchas fotos; cuando se cansaron entraron a la carpa y ninguno tenia sueño y no sabían que hacer, porque por el cansancio no eran capaces de levantarse, pero tampoco de dormir y se estaban aburriendo, entonces a uno de ellos se le ocurrió contar historias de miedo, pero a la niña no le gusto la idea porque era muy miedosa, pero la convencieron y contaron variedades de historias hasta que se cansaron y empezaron a escuchar música, a cantar y así les fue dando sueño y se quedaron dormidos.
Después de dormir aproximadamente dos horas la niña sintió fuera de la carpa ruidos extraños así que despertó a sus amigos para avisarles, ellos no le pusieron mucho cuidado e intentaron dormirse nuevamente, luego volvieron a escuchar el ruido pero esta ves mas fuerte, y todos se despertaron muy asustados al ver afuera una sombra extraña, todos se sentaron sin saber que hacer, cada uno pensó una cosa diferente, uno de ellos pensó que se trataba de un fantasma que quería llevarlos a una dimensión desconocida, la niña pensó que era un vampiro, el mayor pensó que era un extraterrestre que quería llevárselos a su planeta. Ellos decidieron salir a ver que era lo que los asustaba.
El mayor salió de primero, lo siguió el otro niño y la niña por no quedarse sola salió detrás de ellos, de repente apareció una vaca y los asusto pero al verlas se rieron. Luego empezaron a jugar con ella, la ordeñaron y vieron que tenia un collar y un sello que la identificaba y decía la dirección del dueño, así que los jóvenes para que no se escapara la amarraron cuidadosamente, y entraron a la carpa, allí planearon que al otro día se levantarían temprano, organizarían sus cosas, desayunarían y se irían a llevar la vaca a su dueño; por el camino pararían en el lago a bañarse, lavar su ropa y los platos sucios, también entrarían a una casa abandonada y dejarían allí los objetos que mas querían y algunas de sus fotos para que así cuando volvieran, recordarían esta gran experiencia, también iban a aprovechar que era temprano para jugar con los animales que habitaban allí, después de entregar la vaca irían a una heladería a refrescarse y contar a otros amigos y familiares lo bien que habían pasado en este viaje, luego irían a terminar una tarea que se trataba de la mejor experiencia de sus vidas, finalmente se acostaron a dormir y prepararse para este gran día
Entonces empezaron a armar la carpa, como era la primera vez que hacían un campamento ellos no sabían como hacerla y se les callo varias veces, pero no perdían la paciencia por el contrario se divertían cada que esto pasaba, hasta que lo lograron con su trabajo en equipo; esta era una noche fría y decidieron hacer una fogata para calentarse, en esta hicieron malvaviscos, pescado y tomaron soda; ellos para recordar siempre este momento, tomaron muchas fotos; cuando se cansaron entraron a la carpa y ninguno tenia sueño y no sabían que hacer, porque por el cansancio no eran capaces de levantarse, pero tampoco de dormir y se estaban aburriendo, entonces a uno de ellos se le ocurrió contar historias de miedo, pero a la niña no le gusto la idea porque era muy miedosa, pero la convencieron y contaron variedades de historias hasta que se cansaron y empezaron a escuchar música, a cantar y así les fue dando sueño y se quedaron dormidos.
Después de dormir aproximadamente dos horas la niña sintió fuera de la carpa ruidos extraños así que despertó a sus amigos para avisarles, ellos no le pusieron mucho cuidado e intentaron dormirse nuevamente, luego volvieron a escuchar el ruido pero esta ves mas fuerte, y todos se despertaron muy asustados al ver afuera una sombra extraña, todos se sentaron sin saber que hacer, cada uno pensó una cosa diferente, uno de ellos pensó que se trataba de un fantasma que quería llevarlos a una dimensión desconocida, la niña pensó que era un vampiro, el mayor pensó que era un extraterrestre que quería llevárselos a su planeta. Ellos decidieron salir a ver que era lo que los asustaba.
El mayor salió de primero, lo siguió el otro niño y la niña por no quedarse sola salió detrás de ellos, de repente apareció una vaca y los asusto pero al verlas se rieron. Luego empezaron a jugar con ella, la ordeñaron y vieron que tenia un collar y un sello que la identificaba y decía la dirección del dueño, así que los jóvenes para que no se escapara la amarraron cuidadosamente, y entraron a la carpa, allí planearon que al otro día se levantarían temprano, organizarían sus cosas, desayunarían y se irían a llevar la vaca a su dueño; por el camino pararían en el lago a bañarse, lavar su ropa y los platos sucios, también entrarían a una casa abandonada y dejarían allí los objetos que mas querían y algunas de sus fotos para que así cuando volvieran, recordarían esta gran experiencia, también iban a aprovechar que era temprano para jugar con los animales que habitaban allí, después de entregar la vaca irían a una heladería a refrescarse y contar a otros amigos y familiares lo bien que habían pasado en este viaje, luego irían a terminar una tarea que se trataba de la mejor experiencia de sus vidas, finalmente se acostaron a dormir y prepararse para este gran día
Going camping
Once, three teenagers went out on a ecological walk and camping, during their journey they found plants and animals; they sat down a couple of times to rest and eat, for the road was very long; they started singing and telling exciting histories in order not to become bored; then they found a lake where they swam for an hour, and continued their way; when the night came they decided to stop and pass the night there.
And so they started assembling the tent, since it was the first time that they were setting a camp they couldn't do it and it fell several times, but they didn´t lose hope, on the contrary there amused themselves every time it fell, until they achieved it using teamwork; that night was a cold one and they decided to do a fire to warm up, they roasted marshmallows, fish and drank soda; they wanted to remember this moment always, and that´s why they took many photos; when they got tired they got into the tent but none of them was sleepy. They didn't know that to do, because of the weariness they were not capable to stand or sleep and they were getting bored, then one of them got the idea to tell scary stories. But the girl didn't like the idea because she was very afraid, but in the end they convinced her and told lots of stories until they got tired and then they listened to music, sang and in this way they got sleepy and fell asleep. After sleeping approximately two hours, the girl heard strange noises outside the tent, so she woke up her friends to tell them, but they did not care too much and tried to fall asleep again when they heard noises again but this time stronger, and they got up very scared after having seen a strange shaddow outside. They all sat down without knowing what to do, each one thinking of a different thing: one of them thought that it was a ghost wanting to take them away to an unknown dimension, the girl thought that it was a vampire, the older one thought that it was an extraterrestrial being who wanted to take them with him to his planet. They decided to go out to see what it was that scared them.
The older one went out of first, the other one followed him and the girl went out after them so that she didn´t remain alone. Suddenly a cow appeared and startled them but on seeing it they laughed. Then they started to play with it, milked it and saw that it had an identification collar and a stamp with the address of the owner, so they decided to tie it so that it didn´t ran away from the moor. Carefully, they got into the tent, they planned to wake up early the next day, organize their things, have breakfast and return the cow to the owner; on the way back they would stop at the lake to swim, bathe, wash their clothes and the dirty plates, enter into an abandoned house and leave there the objects they liked and some of the photos, for when they return, they would remember this great experience, they would also take advantage of the fact that it was early and play with the animals that were living there. After delivering the cow, they would go to an ice-cream parlor to refresh themselves and to tell their friends and relatives how much they enjoyed this journey, then they would go to finish a task:write about the best experience of their lives.
Finally they went to bed to get ready for that great day.
Now it is correct
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Diana
Once, three teenagers went out on a ecological walk and camping, during their journey they found plants and animals; they sat down a couple of times to rest and eat, for the road was very long; they started singing and telling exciting histories in order not to become bored; then they found a lake where they swam for an hour, and continued their way; when the night came they decided to stop and pass the night there.
And so they started assembling the tent, since it was the first time that they were setting a camp they couldn't do it and it fell several times, but they didn´t lose hope, on the contrary there amused themselves every time it fell, until they achieved it using teamwork; that night was a cold one and they decided to do a fire to warm up, they roasted marshmallows, fish and drank soda; they wanted to remember this moment always, and that´s why they took many photos; when they got tired they got into the tent but none of them was sleepy. They didn't know that to do, because of the weariness they were not capable to stand or sleep and they were getting bored, then one of them got the idea to tell scary stories. But the girl didn't like the idea because she was very afraid, but in the end they convinced her and told lots of stories until they got tired and then they listened to music, sang and in this way they got sleepy and fell asleep. After sleeping approximately two hours, the girl heard strange noises outside the tent, so she woke up her friends to tell them, but they did not care too much and tried to fall asleep again when they heard noises again but this time stronger, and they got up very scared after having seen a strange shaddow outside. They all sat down without knowing what to do, each one thinking of a different thing: one of them thought that it was a ghost wanting to take them away to an unknown dimension, the girl thought that it was a vampire, the older one thought that it was an extraterrestrial being who wanted to take them with him to his planet. They decided to go out to see what it was that scared them.
The older one went out of first, the other one followed him and the girl went out after them so that she didn´t remain alone. Suddenly a cow appeared and startled them but on seeing it they laughed. Then they started to play with it, milked it and saw that it had an identification collar and a stamp with the address of the owner, so they decided to tie it so that it didn´t ran away from the moor. Carefully, they got into the tent, they planned to wake up early the next day, organize their things, have breakfast and return the cow to the owner; on the way back they would stop at the lake to swim, bathe, wash their clothes and the dirty plates, enter into an abandoned house and leave there the objects they liked and some of the photos, for when they return, they would remember this great experience, they would also take advantage of the fact that it was early and play with the animals that were living there. After delivering the cow, they would go to an ice-cream parlor to refresh themselves and to tell their friends and relatives how much they enjoyed this journey, then they would go to finish a task:write about the best experience of their lives.
Finally they went to bed to get ready for that great day.
Now it is correct
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Diana
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Once three teens went out of ecological walk and to encamp, during their journey they found plants and animals; in the way they sat down a couple of times to eating, then way was very long; they don't to get bored started singing and telling exciting stories; then found a lake where swam one hour, and continued their way; when the night came they decided to stop and to pass the night there.
Then started assembling the tent, since it was the first time that they were doing a camp they couldn't do it like and I keep silent about several times, but weren't losing the hope on the contrary there were amusing themselves every that this was passing, until they achieved it with their teamwork; this one was a cold night and they decided to do a bonfire to warm up, in this one they did marshmallows, fish and took soda; they to remember always this moment, took several photos; when they got tired they entered to the tent and none tape-worm I dream and they didn't know that to do, because for the weariness they were not capable of getting up, but of sleeping and they were getting bored either, then to one of them it happened him to tell stories of fear, But the girl doesn't like the idea because she was very fearful, but varieties of stories convinced and told her until they got tired and started listening to music, to singing and this way they was making sleepy them and they remained slept.
After sleeping approximately two hours the girl felt out of the tent strange noises so she woke his friends up to warn them, they did not make him very much elegant and tried to fall asleep again, then they returned to listen to the noise but you see this one more strongly, and they all woke up very scared on having seen out a strange shade, they all sat down without knowing that to do, each one thought a different thing, one of them thought that it was a question of a ghost that she wanted to take them to an unknown dimension, the girl thought that he was a vampire, the major one thought that he was an extraterrestrial being who wanted to take them to him them to your planet. They decided to go out to see that it was what them was scaring.
The major one went out of first, another guy continued it and the girl for doesn't remaining alone go out behind them, suddenly a cow appeared and I scare them but on having seen them they laughed. Then they started playing with it, milked and saw her that tape-worm a necklace and a stamp that was identifying and saying the address of the owner, so the gays doesn't to run away the moor. Carefully, entered to the tent, there they planned that the following day would get up early, they would organize their things, would've breakfast and would be going to remove the cow to your owner; for the way they would stop in the lake to bathing, washing your clothes and the dirty plates, also they would enter to a left house and would leave there the objects that more wanted and some of your photos in order that this way when they were returning, they would remember this great experience, also they were going to take advantage that it was early to play with the animals that they were living there., After delivering the cow would be going to an ice-cream parlor to refresh and be told to other friends and relatives well that had happened in this journey, then they would be going to finish a task that was treating itself about the best experience of their lives, finally they went to bed to sleeping and to be prepared for this great day.
Once three teens went out of ecological walk and to encamp, during their journey they found plants and animals; in the way they sat down a couple of times to eating, then way was very long; they don't to get bored started singing and telling exciting stories; then found a lake where swam one hour, and continued their way; when the night came they decided to stop and to pass the night there.
Then started assembling the tent, since it was the first time that they were doing a camp they couldn't do it like and I keep silent about several times, but weren't losing the hope on the contrary there were amusing themselves every that this was passing, until they achieved it with their teamwork; this one was a cold night and they decided to do a bonfire to warm up, in this one they did marshmallows, fish and took soda; they to remember always this moment, took several photos; when they got tired they entered to the tent and none tape-worm I dream and they didn't know that to do, because for the weariness they were not capable of getting up, but of sleeping and they were getting bored either, then to one of them it happened him to tell stories of fear, But the girl doesn't like the idea because she was very fearful, but varieties of stories convinced and told her until they got tired and started listening to music, to singing and this way they was making sleepy them and they remained slept.
After sleeping approximately two hours the girl felt out of the tent strange noises so she woke his friends up to warn them, they did not make him very much elegant and tried to fall asleep again, then they returned to listen to the noise but you see this one more strongly, and they all woke up very scared on having seen out a strange shade, they all sat down without knowing that to do, each one thought a different thing, one of them thought that it was a question of a ghost that she wanted to take them to an unknown dimension, the girl thought that he was a vampire, the major one thought that he was an extraterrestrial being who wanted to take them to him them to your planet. They decided to go out to see that it was what them was scaring.
The major one went out of first, another guy continued it and the girl for doesn't remaining alone go out behind them, suddenly a cow appeared and I scare them but on having seen them they laughed. Then they started playing with it, milked and saw her that tape-worm a necklace and a stamp that was identifying and saying the address of the owner, so the gays doesn't to run away the moor. Carefully, entered to the tent, there they planned that the following day would get up early, they would organize their things, would've breakfast and would be going to remove the cow to your owner; for the way they would stop in the lake to bathing, washing your clothes and the dirty plates, also they would enter to a left house and would leave there the objects that more wanted and some of your photos in order that this way when they were returning, they would remember this great experience, also they were going to take advantage that it was early to play with the animals that they were living there., After delivering the cow would be going to an ice-cream parlor to refresh and be told to other friends and relatives well that had happened in this journey, then they would be going to finish a task that was treating itself about the best experience of their lives, finally they went to bed to sleeping and to be prepared for this great day.