Ayuda con texto en ingles

Vera el texto en ingles lo he escrito yo, osea que no estoy seguro si esta bien, necesito de alguien que domine para que me pueda sugerir...la idea es que tengo que escribir casi casi el programa de un infomercial, es decir tengo que hacer un infomercial de esos que prometen maravillas por tv "llame ahora, llame ya!!!" y bueno aqui tengo que escribir una introduccion a manera de programa y no se si esta bien escrito porque tiene que ser en ingles a ver como esta...?!
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Once upon a time four cases, four chaotic cases.but their tragedy will be change very soon, (more than you could imagine) because now is a modern invent, a revolutionary invent. The solution of all the problems of the humanity.
In fact these cases are real absolutely, they are like you, like me, like us.! Everyone of them could be one of us, so their problems could be your problems as well. 
But in this moment here comes the most revolutionary and successful "Method of the Secret" (the secret of the secret finally is exposed) to reach every goal in your life. Yes you can believe it, like pray or demand or order even to get what you want. It's similar when you find Aladdin's wonderful lamp.your dreams will be come true! It's simple, it's one hundreed percent real and you must trust in it and you never will fail! No regrets! No disappointments! No promises! No illusions! It's completely guaranteed! Just try it and you start to live the most amazing experience that you ever imagine.!
And you might be in this moment the witness of change to these miserly guys, into come in new men, forever and ever and ever!
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La idea en español es mas o menos asi:
Erase una vez 4 casos, 4 casos catastróficos.pero su desgracia cambiara muy pronto (mas pronto de lo que imaginan) porque ahora existe un moderno y revolucionario invento. La solución de todos los problemas de la humanidad.
De hecho estos casos son reales absolutamente, ellos son como tu, como yo, como nosotros.! Cualquiera de ellos podría ser uno de nosotros, sus problemas podrían ser tus problemas también.
Pero en este momento aquí llega el mas revolucionario y exitoso "Método del Secreto" (el secreto del secreto finalmente es revelado) para alcanzar cualquier objetivo en tu vida. Sí, puedes creerlo, como rogar, pedir u ordenar incluso para conseguir lo que desees. Es como cuando encuentras la lámpara maravillosa de Aladino.tus sueños se harán realidad! Es muy simple, es real ciento por ciento y tu debes confiar y nunca fallaras! Sin lamentos! Sin decepciones! Sin promesas! Sin ilusiones! Esta completamente garantizado! Solo intentalo y empieza a vivir la mas excitante experiencia que alguna vez imaginaste.!
Y tu podrías ser testigo en este momento del cambio de estos desgraciados chicos de cómo se convierten en hombres nuevos para siempre por los siglos de los siglos!
obviamente se aceptan todo tipo de sugerencias e ideas para mejorar, ampliar, etc...
espero su ayuda experto(a)
saludos

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Once upon a time four cases, four chaotic cases. But their tragedy will be change very soon, (more than you could imagine) because there is now a modern and revolutionary invention. The solution of all the problems of the mankind.
In fact these cases are absolutely real,, they are like you, like me, like us.! Any of them could be one of us, so their problems could be your problems too.
But now here comes the most revolutionary and successful "Secret Method" (the secret of the secret is finally revealed) to achieve any purpose in your life .Yes, you can believe it, and beg, or order even to get what you want .It's like when you find the magic lamp of Aladdin .your dreams will be come true! It's simple, it's one hundred percent real and you must trust and will never fail! No regrets! Without disappointments! Without promises! Without illusions! It is fully guaranteed! Just try it and start living the most exciting experience you ever imagined.!
And you could be a witness in this time of change of these unfortunate kids how to become new men for ever and ever and ever!
Obviously welcome any suggestions and ideas to improve, expand, etc ...
Once upon a time four cases, four chaotic cases. But their tragedy will be change very soon, (more than you could imagine) because there is now a modern and revolutionary invention. The solution of all the problems of the mankind. In fact these cases are absolutely real,, they are like you, like me, like us.! Any of them could be one of us, so their problems could be your problems too. But now here comes the most revolutionary and successful "Secret Method" (the secret of the secret is finally revealed) to achieve any purpose in your life .Yes, you can believe it, and beg, or order even to get what you want .It's like when you find the magic lamp of Aladdin .your dreams will be come true! It's simple, it's one hundred percent real and you must trust and will never fail! No regrets! Without disappointments! Without promises! Without illusions! It is fully guaranteed! Just try it and start living the most exciting experience you ever imagined.! And you could be a witness in this time of change of these unfortunate kids how to become new men for ever and ever and ever! Obviously welcome any suggestions and ideas to improve, expand, etc ...
Hola bueno ai te corregi algunos errores, no eran mucho estuvo lindo,
tene en cuenta.. que en ingles, ay muchas formas de expresarse de maneral informal, con palabras informales... o tal vez formal..
Creo quee va a estar bien,.. como te digo,.. si el enseñante o sea quien sea que te evaluara, te dice q esta mal.. posiblemente para el este mal. Xq esperaba otras palabras.. pero en ingles solo ay que saber comunicarse, y como escribiste esto.. esta bien.. spero que tegnas suerte
besos
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Once upon a time, four cases, four chaotic cases, but their tragedy would change very soon, (sooner than they could imagine) because now there exists a modern and revolutionary invention. The solution to all the problems of humanity. These cases are absolutely real, they are like you, like me, like all of us.! Any of them could be any one of us, their problems could be your problems as well.
But in this moment, here comes the most revolutionary and successful "Method of the Secret" (the secret of the secret is finally revealed) to reach every goal in your life. Yes you can believe it, to demand or order to get what you desire. It's like when you find Aladdin's wonderful lamp, your dreams will come true! It's very simple, it's one hundred percent real and you must trust in it and you will never fail! No regrets! No disappointments! No promises! No illusions! It's completely guaranteed! Just try it and begin to live the most amazing experience that you had ever imagined.!
And you may be a witness at this moment of time to the change of these miserly guys, of how they convert themselves into new men for ever, and for the centuries of the centuries!. 
We obviously accept all types of suggestions and ideas to change for the better, expand, etc...
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Olaaaa(:.
Dejamee decirt eee kee es mui buenaa traduccion a ingles, i por supuesto mui conjugados los verbos, esta perfecto((:
Cuidatee mushooo!

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